- Audience were able to receive some emotional involvement
- good running foot shot
- good use of ellipsis-doesn't show all of the running and the actor taking her clothes off
Improvements-
- Logo-make it more professional-make it an animated title
- give more variety of camerawork
- make shots brighter
- make titles more professional-don't include names that you don't need storyboard artist.
- Don't loops the sound as it goes on for too long
- don't let heartbeat sound go on for too long
- running, long shot needs to be close as you have just gained a relationship with the character as its just come from close up to the face.
- When you drop the key, maybe say "shit" to make her sound more real and distressed about the situation
- When you drop the key, edit out harry's gloves.
- zoom in camera-too jogged, not normal-camera needs to be more static
- Mirror shot-maybe a high angle, makes her look more distant or character looking directly at the camera to increase the relationship.
- Don't put normal clothes back on when you get out of the shower
- When you open the door and the title comes after it looks like the end of a trailer, either put a big reveal at the end or don't use the door shot at all.
Logo-
- Smaller picture, name comes up below
- not handwritten, animated text makes it look more real and professional
Titles-
- Any names that you like to make it more professional, you don't need the actual job roles on the film, as long as it looks real and professional
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